Some people believe that if an individual behaves in an anti-social manner, such as committing a crime, then society is to blame. What are the causes of anti-social behaviour? Who do you think is responsible?

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Society has different opinions on who is the real culprit when someone commits any
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, whether is it
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or his surroundings. As far as I am concerned, both are equally played their own role in
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matter. The main two reasons
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terrible situation are unemployment and illiteracy, and
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essay will support my views in
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paragraphs. Regarding
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of criminal
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, the
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and foremost is lack of employment opportunities. In
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unemployed
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engage illegal activities to earn money within a short span of time: committing theft, shoplifting, and murders. Another point is that poor education, which would make them unemployable even if the government had
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number of jobs. Eventually, not only do these two factors worsen the existing rates, but
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can increase
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an alarming rate;
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, in India, where total crimes have been grown significantly as illiteracy and
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skyrocketed, so I firmly believe that these are the major reasons. Why I consider society and individuals is responsible for criminal activities as follows. One obvious justification is that if the community had given proper education and guidance to the offenders while they were at schools, they would not offend now.
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, every individual has
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obligation and capacity to understand what is right and wrong. Despite blaming the authority, the delinquents themselves need to introspect to realize their liability in
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matter, and
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of society and people
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clear and evident.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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