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It is inevitable that traditional cultures will be lost as technology develops. Technology and traditional cultures are incompatible. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view.

#cultures #technology
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 era of modern ,
technology
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people
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 can access
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 information due to
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. The traditional
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 which developed more than 100 year ago
people
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 can easily forget that due to a lot of foreign
culture
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 exposer over the internet.
Technology
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 is developing faster than traditional
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 so traditional
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 and
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 are incompatible. On the one ,
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 traditional
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 is the identity of
people
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 of a specific geographical area which is developed long before. For ,example how they meet with each other how they express their feeling is their
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 and they obey that.
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culture
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also
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 developed by their surrounding geographical condition suppose to dress up of a
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 fully depend on the weather condition of that area. So traditional
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 is a part of a national origin and their identity it should not mess up with different
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.
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,
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 is now developed very
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 it gives lots of benefits to
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. It
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 takes
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 feeling from their cultural aesthetic and importance.
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 are trying to
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 more technological tools than their ancestor's traditional tools,
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example
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 our ancestor
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hand
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 power tools to cook their meal and
use
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hand
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 spice grinder etc but modern
people
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use
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 the micro oven and electric grinder which destroy the traditional test and texture but only prepared the meal faster.
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Finally
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people
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 can't pass their day without modern
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 which is true but they show keep company with their traditional
culture
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. There we need a good co-operation
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 few traditional cultures we will lose over the time we should preserve that in our museum and digitally. In conclusion, to survive in
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 modern era we must
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 modern
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 and
need
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 preserve our own
culture
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 and express them by using
among
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apply
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modern
technology
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • inevitable
  • traditional cultures
  • technological development
  • modern society
  • incompatible
  • decline
  • traditional crafts
  • rituals
  • digital communication
  • preserve
  • promote
  • documentation
  • online archives
  • virtual museums
  • social media
  • coexist
  • integrates
  • digital storytelling
  • augmented reality
  • cultural tourism
  • perspective
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