The charts below show the percentage of people working in different sectors in town A and town B in 1960, 2010.

The charts below show the percentage of people working in different sectors in town A and town B in 1960, 2010.
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The pie charts give information about the proportion of
staffs
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working in three various departments in
town
A and
town
B between 1969 and 2010. Looking at the graph, it is immediately obvious that employees who worked in manufacturing increased in both towns during the period shown.
However
, sales-related jobs were the greatest increase in
town
A and
town
B.
According to
the chart of
town
A, it can be seen that workers in
manufacturing
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department made up 41
percent
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which was the largest group.
This
was followed by a drop of 21
percent
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over the
next
40 years.
Similarly
, sales-related
occupation
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occupations
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declined slightly from 30 to 16
percent
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.
Such
a trend was not seen in the figure for the proportion of staff working in services, which increased significantly by 36
percent
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. Turing to
town
B, it is broadly similar to
town
A, the most staff were employed in manufacturing.
After
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40 years later,
this
figure decreased to 53
percent
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. In 1960, 20 and 10
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of people worked in sales and services respectively.
On the other hand
, there was a gradual rise in the percentage of both those
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over a period of forty years.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words town, percent with synonyms.
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