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🔶In their advertising, businesses nowadays usually emphasise that their products are new in some way. 🔸Why is this happening? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

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Naw days , it has been advertised by businesses that their
production
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 is the best and new .
although
 it can be a merit for companies , I think
this
 idea would be a disadvantage of advertising development . In the following essay , both of the views will be discussed.
Advertisements
 in businesses might be effective to attract customers. When a company advertises for
it
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its
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produces
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products
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 which are emphasised
that is
 new , many of
people
 can be familiar with the new services or tools .
This
 kind of notice encourages the public to
purchasing
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 goods and trying on the services. When technological devices have been attended by
people
 around the world and if an organization advertises a new
electronical
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electronic
 gadget
such
 as an intelligent mobile phone ,
people
 will be unattractive to buy it. It can
therefore
 be argued that the more marketings do notice for their produces , the more customer they can behave .
In
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 the other hand ,It may be a negative point for
people
 . When there is a competition between marketing to take
people
 attention to organisation attendances , some unrealistic
advertisements
 in some businesses would appear. So , the public can not have satisfaction whit their buying as the result of some sham notices in some business about the produces. As an example , some customers order the new
produce
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products
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 which the
durability
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materials used in the production are advertised by a company while in
real
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a real
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 situation it is not according to
advertisement
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the advertisement
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 .
Consequently
 , a business might do unreal
advertisements
 to compare whit other rivals in the same industry which create sham notices . In conclusion , in my view , if business introduces their new productions to
people
 , they will be able to succeed in their industry.
Also
 , as a
,
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demerit comparative marketing is observed between companies which can be
cuse
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caused
 by doing some
advertisements
that is
 unrealistic to give customers attentions.
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