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Do you believe that experimentation on animals for scientific purposes is justified. Are there any alternatives to animal experimentation?

#experimentation #animals #purposes #alternatives
Medical science has improved tremendously over
last
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 few decades. The majority of the
medicines
 available in the market have been tested on
animals
 and once
the
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satisfactory results have been received, those
medicines
 are approved for human
use
. Many people question these days is it required to torture creature in the name of medical needs. Experimenting on
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creature for scientific purposes has been adopted for many years so certainly there must be few advantages of it.
Firstly
, human life is very important so it would not be a wise step to try
medicines
 directly on humans. Experimenting on
animals
 is a proven technique. Our science has discovered that the human body is similar to
animals
.
For example
, anaesthesia, which is used to make
animals
 unconscious, works
similarly
 on humans.
On the other hand
, it is definitely inhumane to treat
animals
 as a machine.
Animals
 are tortured during the
experiments
.
For instance
, to test the nail polish, the chemical is put into
rabbit's
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 eyes. Because
animals
 cannot speak, we are unable to understand their pain. In
few
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 of the
experiments
, the animal's body parts are being cut one by one to capture the record
the
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 medicine's effect. Science has progressed in all
the
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directions. So, we surely have few alternatives which should be encouraged to alternate animal experimentation. One of them is to
use
 more natural
products
. If the demand for the chemical product is reduced,
such
experiments
 would definitely be reduced.
For instance
, many cosmetic companies are selling natural beauty
products
, where it is clearly mentioned that "Not tried on
animals
". If people increase the
use
 of
such
products
, other cosmetic companies would
also
 try to sell natural
products
. If we can develop
medicines
 to reduce human pain, we should
also
 create
medicines
 to reduce animal’s pain during
experiments
. I believe that we all have equal rights to live happy and healthy lives on
this
 planet. I would say we should promote a healthier lifestyle to reduce the overall
use
 of
medicines
.
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The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

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