It is not necessary to travel to other places to learn the culture of other people. We can learn just as much from books, films, and the internet. Do you agree or disagree?

People
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people
should not spend quality time
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to other
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in order to learn
culture
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. Other
people
argue that we are able to embrace books, films via the
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statement because
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the main reasons comprise my essay. We are living in an information age that helps all aspects of our lives
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or to say that the
Internet
covers almost all the corners of the world.
Therefore
, it is understandable that
people
think they can learn about
culture
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of some
countries
by reading, watching or even using the
Internet
. It can be convenient and economical for
people
who could no longer make
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efforts
afford
to travel or go overseas. In
this
day and age, the filmmakers and film producers who have a tendency to integrate cultures from different
countries
in the films,
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facilitates for
people
to learn about
this
.
In addition
, they have access to the
Internet
and find answers for questions or issues that
people
pay attention to or focus on. On the others, learning through publications,
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, cannot efficient and have
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bearing on our knowledge as
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cover most badly news or misinformation news or some information is not sufficient for
people
to acquire knowledge, which could lead to increase difficulties during
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period In terms of travelling, it can be obviously seen that the countless benefits
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for our lives. One major advantage of travelling is
people
can garner life experiences, cultivate practical skills in lieu of learning full theories through newspaper or
Internet
. During the period of
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you might make new friends which would seem to generate a big circle of relationships across the world. Compare to studying or visualizing via movie
people
experience and the uniqueness of the culture of different
countries
. Researchers illustrated that travelling to other
countries
is one of the most efficient ways to broaden horizons and learn a new language as you have to communicate with native speakers every day. As mentioned above, I totally disagree
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opinion, travelling is the best way in order to develop your knowledge overwhelmingly and embrace host
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