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Big salary is much more important than job satisfaction. Do you agree or disagree ? Provide relevant examples if necessary.

#salary #job #satisfaction
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It is often said that feeling great at a
job
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 is not as important as having a good
salary
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, but it is not necessarily true all the time. When
people
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 enjoy their
job
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 normally they are more motivated in what they do,
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 why it is more likely that they progress in it.
On the other hand
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, having a big
salary
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 allows
people
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 to have a lot of things
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 as houses, travels among others.
First
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 of all, receiving a big
salary
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 for most
people
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 could be an enormous motivation and the most important thing when they are looking for a
job
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 offer. With
this
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 quantity
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of money
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money
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 they could buy a house for their children, go on vacation to another country, go to restaurants and other luxuries that other
people
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 can't do. But
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 and normally these
people
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 are on high levels of stress and pressure.
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 when
people
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 enjoy what they do and find satisfaction in their
job
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 they feel great and normally their progress is more often than the
people
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 who do not have it, and progress at the end means more money. Having said that, satisfaction in the workplace is more important than a big
salary
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 because
people
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 are less stressed out, having a great time and receiving money for that. Even though there are some positive aspects about receiving a big
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,
people
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 should think more about feeling great about what they do for a living, because probably they could have more opportunities through their professional lives.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • remuneration
  • financial security
  • motivation
  • luxuries
  • material possessions
  • fulfillment
  • work-life balance
  • stress levels
  • mental well-being
  • job security
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