Many manufactured food and drink products contain high level of sugar, which causes many health problems sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar. Do you agree or disagree.
Now a days
many youngsters are addicted Correct the word
Nowadays
towards
eating fast food as well as sugary food equally Change preposition
to
also
interested to drink sugar contain product
Add an article
a product
that’s
the reason
in
Change preposition
at
youngish
age they Replace the word
young
are suffer
from different Change the verb form
are suffering
health
issues and their life
span also
reduce. That’s
the reason
sugary product
increase their cost to control taken sweet products which helps
to maintain Change the verb form
help
health
.
In my opinion
I totally agree Add a comma
,opinion
to
Change preposition
with
above
statement because taken sweet products are harmful to Correct article usage
the above
human
body. it is the main source of creating Add an article
the human
heath
issues. Correct your spelling
health
That’s
the reason
eating more sweets their production is high and cost
is Add an article
the cost
also
high.
To begin
with
Add a comma
,with
consume
Change the verb form
consuming
sweet
Add an article
the sweet
product
on
occasionally which are not harmed but consume in high quantity it gives Change preposition
apply
invitation
to Add an article
an invitation
the invitation
health
issues. Like diebetis
, obesity, digestive system Correct your spelling
diabetes
problems
, hormonal imbalance etc. although
diebetis
, obesity type of Correct your spelling
diabetes
diabetic
disease
are Add an article
the disease
permanant
for Correct your spelling
permanent
life
long. And due to these reason
youngsters can not enjoy their Add a comma
,reason
life
properly. Faces stress related
Add a hyphen
stress-related
problems
also
which reduce their life
.
Secondly
, overcome from
all these Change preposition
apply
problems
with the help of consuming less amount of sugary foods like coca cola
, Add a hyphen
coca-cola
thums
up, and Correct your spelling
thumbs
another
Replace the adjective
another backery sweet item
other backery sweet items
backery
sweet items. Correct your spelling
bakery
Moreover
replace them with Add a comma
,Moreover
home made
sugary dish which is made from jaggery. Etc.
Correct your spelling
homemade
Thirdly
, because of increasing
amount of eating sweet Add an article
the increasing
an increasing
foods
the production is Add a comma
,foods
also
on high bases and that’s
why their market value also
high. And it’s a sign from related
sugary factory to consume Add an article
the related
less
sugary Add an article
the less
product
. Moreover
every company wrote on that Add a comma
,Moreover
product
“ it contain
sugar and harmful for Change the verb form
contains
health
”.
Again for example
after covid 19 pandamic
Correct your spelling
pandemic
situation
Change to a plural noun
situations
diebetic
Correct your spelling
diabetic
patient
they deal with the Add a comma
,patient
next
health
issue i.e mucarmycosis
, black fungus they lost their one of the body parts like eye skin etc.
Correct your spelling
mucormycosis
Lastly
I conclude that , eating more sugary Add a comma
,Lastly
product
people are faces different health related
Add a hyphen
health-related
problems
which dismiss their beautiful life
. So consume sweet products in fixed
quantity. Because “Add an article
a fixed
health
is wealth”.Submitted by padmajakulkarni140 on
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