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The position of women in society has changed markedly in the last twenty years. Many of the problems young people now experience, such as juvenile delinquency, arise from the fact that many married women now work and are not at home to care for their children. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, females play a crucial role in every country and the position of
women
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 in a different part of society has been gained significantly.
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 they might only responsible for their
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's nurture, I believe that there are various reasons which lead females to
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 out of their home. On the one hand, some people believe that nurture of the
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 must be done only by mothers.
Women
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 ,due to their nature, have emotions that can have a strong effect on the babies growth
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 as their kindness which can be seen less in men. Under
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 ,circumstances they can spend more
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 the young generation and learn to them how they can live. As result, there is no more
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 for working out of the home for mothers and it might be less productive if they carry out jobs because of the responsibilities that they have against their
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.
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, gender equality must be considered in most parts of life. It means that whenever men have permission to
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,
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 must be permitted to
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 and home's responsibilities
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 as spending
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 for babies must be divided between both man and
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. From
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 perspective not only married
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 can
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 and bring some economical advantage for the family, but
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 they grow up their babies behind the
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 times.
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, In today's world, the cost of education is too high and families can mostly afford it if both parents
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 at the same
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. One of the most important things about car
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 in their path of learning. In
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 way, there are a lot of classes which they must be attended which demand a huge amount of money.
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, the mother and father of the family must be worked to earn money for
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's improvement. Obviously, in each stage of young boy's and girl's life, there are necessary technological devices which must be bought for them. In conclusion, because of gender equality and the cost of leaving every people must have permission and
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 behind each other but the nurture of
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 should not be underestimated.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • evolution
  • domestic roles
  • diverse professional engagements
  • dual-working parents
  • family dynamics
  • juvenile delinquency
  • societal and economic factors
  • dual-income households
  • childcare methods
  • community support systems
  • gender roles
  • family responsibilities
  • professional aspirations
  • development needs
  • correlation
  • simplistic causation
  • workplace policies
  • flexible hours
  • parental leave
  • gender equality
  • role models
  • successful womanhood
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