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In britain ,when someone gets old they often go to live in a home with other old people where there are nurses to look after them sometimes government should has to pay for this care who do you think should pay for this care ,the government or the families?give reason and include relevant examples

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In developed countries ,
oftenly
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often
 grey society starts
livibg
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living
 in old
age
 home with other older people,where the regimes
provides
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 basic amenities .In my
opinion
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 it makes the duty of both government as well as families to look after their
parents
 when they get old.   There
are
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 numerous reason which
provide
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provides
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 support to my opinion.
First
 and foremost ,older people are financially dependent upon someone ,especially when they have no source of income.During
this
age
,they are physically unfit and unable to do any job ,in
such
 condition they have no other option left ,which could force
to
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them to live in old
age
 home.
For instance
 in
USA
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the USA
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 and Uk like countries,where regimes
provides
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provide
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 pension and free medical services to old
age
 people.
Secondly
,
parents
devotes
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devote
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 their whole life in the upbringing of their offsprings.when the
parents
gets
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 old ,they
also
 need physical and emotional support from their family members.
For instance
 in India it is
norm
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 and
its
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apply
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moral responsibility of the family members to look after their
parents
.
As a result
 a survey conducted by UNO in which they revealed 80%of elder citizens living with their families and enjoys the
warm
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 and love from their family members. To conclude,it makes the duty of families to look after their old
parents
 and meet their basic necessities .
Neverthless
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Nevertheless
 ,
regime
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the regime
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 should
allocates
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 fund and free medical facilities which could help in
makeng
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making
 them financially independent.
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