The graphs below show the average water temperature in Hawaii in the year 1990 and 2000.
The line charts showed the comparisons of the average water temperature in Hawaii over the year between 1990 and 2000.
Overall
, the average water heater in Hawai
in 1990 did not have a significant number, Correct your spelling
Hawaii
although
,in 2000, the chart showed there is a fluctuation amount.
Firstly
, during the year 1990, the trend of the average water warmth had smooth movement where started
at 70 degrees in January and 72 in December. Wrong verb form
starting
Furthermore
, the highest temperature was in august at 74 strength.
On the other hand
, in 2000, the line graphic
showed a fluctuating number of temperatures. In the beginning, the temperature of the rain has been seen at 74 terms, after that the average Replace the word
graph
of
Change preposition
apply
temperatures
Fix the agreement mistake
temperature
increase
dramatically and Correct subject-verb agreement
increases
rise
Correct subject-verb agreement
rises
the
peak of the graph at 80 degrees in august. Change preposition
to the
However
, after August, the line chart decreases significantly until December to 72 strength.Submitted by auzanghiffari on
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