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Some people decide to start their own business instead of working for a company or organization. Do the advantages for people working for their own business outweigh the disadvantages? Give reason for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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The goals for every individual are always different, like having their own business or grouping up in the company for a better position. When those people decide to have their own business, it is because they have some capital, good ideas and the main reason they have is the challenge for a new start. The beginning will be a struggle, for that reason it is important that they have the knowledge about their new business, to have a market study and to do the things step by step. It allows them to have better control for the new project. n brief, some individuals prefer to work in parallel before taking the big step, others prefer to have the big challenge
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 the history of the company owners will dare and change forever their lives and the lives of others.
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