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Some people feel that boarding schools (where students or pupils live at the school during the term) are an excellent option for children, while other people disagree for a number of reasons. Consider both sides of this debate and reach a conclusion

#people #schools #students #pupils #school #term #option #children #debate #conclusion
Most of the
people
 agree that students live
in
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campus
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the campus
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 during the term but, caused of several reasons other
people
are disagrees
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.
This
 essay will discuss
about
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apply
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reasons
of
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why
people
 agree
,
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 and disagree with
this
 topic. On the one hand, staying in
dormitory
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a dormitory
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 can give you more opportunities to
be succeed
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.
For instance
, it will make it easier to do their homework. There are everything related to the lesson is at once and it is easy to communicate with other students.
On the other hand
, it
is seem
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 that seeing with many
people
 can affect learning. To be successful, a person needs to focus their lesson, but
this
 can be lost little by little dealing with many
people
. If you make friends with
wrong
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 one, it is obvious that you will distract. Point of view, it is my belief that lifestyle of
hallway
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the hallway
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 is not
good
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a good
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 option. Staying there will
gives
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 you lots of chance, but most of it would not help you to study. Sometimes international students
has
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 not many
option
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,
however
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,however
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 rent an apartment gives you way better comfortable and
chance
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a chance
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 to study.
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