Some people think that famous people's support towards International aid organisations draws attention to problems, while others think that celebrities make the problem less important.Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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views and I agree with a former opinion
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the common public might be given more
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very soon. Many help and donate money for their
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help to solve any global matter when they are being
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actress Mrs Priyanka Chopra was an
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ambassador
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India project
while
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supporters
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helped
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to
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that project
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financially and personally in order to that project
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successful.
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immediately
, many social
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will
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invite
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any
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celebrities
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which indeed will get
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public eye on it.
Therefore
, the
celebrities
' support should be needed.
On the other hand
,
people
focus on only
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their
favourite
folks
instead
of
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the particular
issue
when their
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actors are being
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ambassdor
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ambassador
. The fame might be reduced the problem's
attention
and seriousness.
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, if an actor gives
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about any serious trouble,
people
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their
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way of speech and how he dressed
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the problem.
Hence
, these
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people
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any
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issue
which cannot provide the
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the problem by the population.
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although
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the
issue
to become debatable and
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more
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all folks, the population can be distracted by
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celebrities
instead
of
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addressing
the problems.
However
, I agree
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the
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famous
people
can be supported
to
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by
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the
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serious troubles by
attention
when they are being
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ambassdors
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ambassador
ambassadors
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Philanthropy
  • International aid
  • Humanitarian
  • Public discourse
  • Star power
  • Awareness
  • Oversimplification
  • Trivialization
  • Expertise
  • Misinformation
  • Sustainability
  • Advocacy
  • Tangible
  • Influence
  • Endorsement
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