The crime rate nowadays is decreasing compared to the past due to the advances in technology which can prevent and solve crime. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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In recent years, the rate of crime is less than in the past years, some
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point out that because our society has advanced technology. In the following essay, I will give my opinion and analysis
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who want to commit crimes.
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, There are two main reasons that progressive technology could decrease the rate of crime.
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accept more comprehensive education and environments, so
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have aware to reduce
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