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Some businesses find that their new employees lack basic interpersonal skills, such as cooperative skills. What are the causes and suggest some possible solutions.

#businesses #employees #lack #skills
Nowadays, there are several factors which play a vital role in
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 of every
businesses
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business
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 and
employee's
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 behaviour is one of the most important of them. As result,
system
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 will be damaged if workers have not enough personal skills. In
this
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 there are some problems of
this
 negative aspect and how these problems can be solved. On the one
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 some of the employees are chosen without any productive
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. Companies and business environment require some basic personal's skill
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 as responsibility which can easily recognize if
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 are checked by several interviews. These interviews can reveal some of the
personality
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 of persons and it can prevent some possible side effects in the future.
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 their resume is great a way to check their performance in
workplace
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. some of the people who have negative behaviour in the work environment change their jobs a lot and it can be easily
undrestand
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understand
understood
 if their resume is checked perfectly. There are several ways in order to avoid these problems.
Firstly
 new employee must be checked for 1 month
befor
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before
 their contract. In
this
 month some of the person's function and personality will be monitored by experts. Under
such
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circumstance
cercumestace
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 they can learn more about their behaviour and it leads them to choose a productive person. It is clear that while they are asked by some experts
such
 as psychologists in their
interview
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interviews
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, a suitable individual can be chosen easily. In conclusion,
although
 some people may have great performance in businesses ,except their career resume, some of their personalities must be checked by experts to avoid some possible risks in the future.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • interpersonal skills
  • cooperative skills
  • face-to-face interaction
  • digital communication
  • non-verbal cues
  • active listening
  • education system
  • technical knowledge
  • soft skills
  • remote work
  • work environment
  • comprehensive training programs
  • workshops
  • teamwork
  • role-playing scenarios
  • open communication
  • collaborative efforts
  • educational institutions
  • curriculums
  • hybrid work models
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