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Nowadays movies and computer games containing violence are very popular. Some people believe that they have a negative effect on society and should be banned, others, however, believe that it is harmless entertainment. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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One fact which I believe to be absolutely pivotal is the fact that with the advancement of technology the ways of entertainment have changed.While some people believe that it is a new trend
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 movies and computer games which contain violence is that it has the power to change community behaviour at a vast level and make them aggressive. It is the fact that continuous exposure
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, audiences are influenced by their favourite actors and try to attempt those events later.
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, other people believe that it is harmful entertainment and ought to be continued as it is a stress burn and entertains the society.
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, PUBG was the most popular game among youngsters but later the government banned it for creating unnecessary violence ,
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 the content, its effect and impact
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 today’s generation has the ability to differentiate between real and reel,
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 in movies and games has less impact on people.
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