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Due to increase use of aeroplane, air pollution is increasing more and more airports are constructed. Some people say that government should reduce air traffic by taxing it heavily. Do you agree or disagree?

#aeroplane #air #pollution #airports #people #government #traffic
Airways are the modern
way
 for
people
 to move from one place to another as it reduces time, money and energy. Certain
people
 argue that airway transport
are
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 causing more air
pollution
 than ever before but I strongly
diasgree
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disagree
to
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this
 statement and in
this
essay
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 I will support my opinion with examples.
Firstly
, airways
is
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are
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 not
the
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apply
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just the predominant cause of air
pollution
.
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, think of
this
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way
, if
people
 were forced to use roadways for moving
thousands
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 miles
then
 imagine the cost of fuel and time wasted towards that process.
Also
, imposing
tax
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a tax
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 would lead to the usage of airways only by elite
people
 which would not be a great idea. Another reason why I disagree is
because
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, if
pollution
 is a problem we need to resort to
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the way
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way
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ways
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 in which we could curb the
pollution
instead
 of imposing
tax
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a tax
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 on airfare.
For instance
,
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government
goverment
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the goverment
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 should invest more
into
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in
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 the research of
bio-fuel
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biofuel
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 or electric fuel which would actually save the environment as well as the time and energy of the
people
.
Finally
, the modern
way
 of transport is causing some
problem
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problems
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, the solution would be
find
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to find
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 an alternative
way
 to overcome the issue with advanced technology and solutions. Raising
tax
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the tax
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 would eventually put a hole in
comman
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common
 man's pocket and it would curb the
pollution
.
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