All over the world, societies are facing a growing problem with obesity. This problem affects both children and adults. What are the reasons for this rise in obesity, how could it be tackled?

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are facing different
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now, physical or mental. One of the major issues associated with the body is
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weight obstacle. The public of all age groups are facing the problem of obesity and there are many
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associated with it.
To begin
with, one of the primary reasons for
this
condition is the change in lifestyle. folk now have adopted a routine that deals with more technologically advanced types of equipment which reduces their physical working. The activities preferred by
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involve more rest and almost no physical inputs.
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, society earlier used to go to gardens to play games like badminton or football. But now, it has completely been taken over by mobile games, computer games or movies.
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reduces any form of workout
that is
mandatory to maintain a healthy weight.
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, cuisine habits are being adopted from western culture. Earlier ,
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preferred eating
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and light
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. But now
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prefer going out in restaurants, eating fried and overcooked cuisine which is not good for the body. To overcome
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, efforts should be done personally and by the government. At a personal level , individuals should start going for a walk and switch to healthy eating, avoid overconsumption of oily
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etc . At the public level, the government should introduce weekly marathons and competitions which will help people to come up and start involving in
such
activities.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Obesity
  • Overweight
  • Epidemic
  • Sedentary
  • Processed food
  • Fast food
  • Nutritional education
  • Awareness
  • Stress
  • Emotional eating
  • Genetic factors
  • Access
  • Healthy food options
  • Marketing
  • Urbanization
  • Lifestyles
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