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In many countries, women and men are working full-time. It is therefore logical for women and men to share household chores. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

#countries #women #men #household #chores
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In some places in the world, males and females have
full-
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job
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, it is feasible for them to share
household
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chores
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. I strongly concur with that point of view despite the fact that it is not fair in sharing housework in other countries. There still
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exits
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 the belief that males are the
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back bone
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 of
family
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 who
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 only responsible for earning money and working at
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, whereas their counterparts are seemed to have no chance to raise their voice in their own house. It appears
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definitely obvious that females are
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of
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 taking care of children, cooking, cleaning, worshipping, etc. I do not have the same idea
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 that.
Household
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chores
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 should be
share
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shared
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 fairly between husbands and wives because of
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 following reasons.
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, it is the way to show respect to each other. Sweet home is not built by only bricks and concrete,
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 by respect and love. If a husband could spend
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of
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laying on the couch as usual for helping cooking or cleaning, their wife would apparently relax sometimes. As the result, the wife would become more lenient and more gorgeous, thanks to the understanding from their spouse.
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, men and women in the modern era find
household
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chores
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 no longer as the burden with the assistance from modern equipment,
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: washing machine, automatic
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vacuum
 machine,
dish washer
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.
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 of using
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 of precious
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 after work for doing housework, they ask the machines to do it.
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, they could have
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 for each other. In conclusion, women and men in the modern world, who are busy with their own full-
time
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 work, should share
household
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chores
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 with each other in order to have
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higher respect from their partners and have more
time
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 to relax after stressful working hours.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Gender equality
  • Household chores
  • Dual-income families
  • Work-life balance
  • Traditional gender roles
  • Division of labor
  • Egalitarian
  • Mental well-being
  • Societal attitudes
  • Efficiency
  • Domestic responsibilities
  • Cultural norms
  • Upbringing
  • Role models
  • Familial dynamics
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