Many children these days face difficulties to concentrate or pay attention at school. What are the causes of this situation? What could be the possible solutions?

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most of the students are

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less attention at

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on entertainment

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that particular problem. Most of the schools offer a big number of

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for students and they give lots of

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, these children do not focus on

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to students.

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problem, we can take some

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facilities.

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hours time can refresh their mind.

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problem, but it will recover if

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

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