Many children these days face difficulties to concentrate or pay attention at school. What are the causes of this situation? What could be the possible solutions?

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technological distractions
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nutritional deficiencies
sleep deprivation
learning disorders
stress and anxiety
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Many children these days face difficulties to concentrate or pay attention at school. What are the causes of this situation? What could be the possible solutions?

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