Each year, the crime rate increases. What are the causes of crime and what could be done to prevent this rise in criminal activity?

Nowadays, the percentage of crime rates has been increased
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following paragraphs discuss what are the problems of increasing the
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the government and individuals. On the one hand, there are major
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reasons behind
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rate
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crisis and do not have any
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money.
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country are facing an increasing unemployment
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many
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crimes
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in
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young people
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have divorce
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the child
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bad friends and follow them in a wrong way of life.
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by best
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in different ways.
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with
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role, it should find
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and work with other modern countries to improve their economy
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that will lead to
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a quality of education and
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job
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.
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them to participate in community services that
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helps to increase
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solution that the parents monitor their children and give them a warm and best family environment.
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from the
crimes
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themselves working busy all the time. To conclude, the
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society and that why the government and individuals should act by
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this
problem in different ways.
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