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In Britain, when someone gets old they often go to live in a home with other old people where there are nurses to look after them. Sometimes the government has to pay for this care. Who do you think should pay for this care, the government or the family?

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Older
people
 go to retirement homes where they are being looked after by nurses. In most of the countries,
such
 as Britain, the government pays for their living which some
people
 believe should not be done as it is the
responsiblity
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responsibility
responsibly
 of the family.
However
, in my opinion, the foremost duty is of the administration of the country.
To begin
 with, when
people
 at
the
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 young age work, they contribute a lot to their nation's economy. They work in different
kind
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kinds
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 of professions
such
 as health care, financial, sports etc. They pay huge
amount
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amounts
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 of taxes which in turn help the country to meet their economic standards or goals,
for instance
. When they become older, it
comes
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 the system turn to pay back their efforts and
hardwork
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hard work
. As senior citizens, they should be provided with all the amenities they need.
On the other hand
, it is
also
 said that the government already served them with all the facilities at their younger age.
Therefore
, now families should look after their expenses.
Firstly
, the families already struggling with their own expenditures and cannot bear one another living cost on them. They have to manage their
livlihood
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livelihood
 like, their children education and other household spendings.
Secondly
, some
people
 do not have their families or lost them,
for example
, in an accident or they never married. In
such
 cases, they can not be left alone as they are not able to work.
Thus
, they should
kept
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 in home cares with other old residents and enjoy their rest of the life peacefully. Overall, I believe that if the person serves their nation working hard in their younger days, now, becomes the duty of the nation to serve them.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
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  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Aging population
  • Elderly care
  • Nursing homes
  • Social welfare
  • Intergenerational responsibility
  • Caregiving
  • Financial burden
  • Quality of life
  • Pension funds
  • Healthcare policy
  • Taxation
  • Subsidies
  • Private insurance
  • Long-term care
  • Sustainability
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