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The table elucidates how much money spent on renting based on three different locations, size of the houses and remunerations. At a cursory glance, Notting Hill is
the
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 expensive area and people who live
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 apartment receives the highest
salary
 in the given groups. Regarding the lowest rental rate can be seen in Fulham with only 215£ for
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 house. The rental price of
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bedroom
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 is almost 300% higher than the lowest in that area,
similarly
,
salary
 differences
also
 follow the same pattern. In Regent' Park and Notting Hill,differences
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 and rent between upper and lower classes
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 almost double. Interestingly,
those
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 who belong
in
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 the middle class,
rental
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 price is ranging roughly between 400 and 500£, and
salary
 is 100000 to 125000£.
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