To achieve personal happiness, the relationships we have with other people (friends, colleagues, family) are more essential than every other thing. Issues like wealth and occupations take the second place. Write to support this claim
In the recent world, the living style and thinking of
people
have been changed as compared to traditional
world. Add an article
the traditional
Furthermore
, people
have become more career-oriented and busy in the race of increasing their wealth. But it is undeniable that the secret of real happiness is still associated with friends and family. This
will be proven by bringing up the example of superstars who spent most of their time in loneliness and in depression despite of
having all luxuries.
To demonstrate that money can not buy happiness, the activity of wealthy nation can be taken as an example Remove the preposition
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such
as it is commonly seen in the news that there are many actors, singers and athletes who take anti-depression medicines and comment suicide in spite of having bank balances, living in Villas and living a life that we can only imagine. This
proves that fame and luxury are not adequate for inner peace and self-contentment.
Secondly
, we can not create emotions and feeling
in Fix the agreement mistake
feelings
somesone
heart by the use of materialistic things. Correct your spelling
someone
someone's
Lets
take an example of Replace the word
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Let us
people
living in few decades whoes
life were more simple and natural Correct your spelling
whose
who's
then
our and they had true affection towards their relations as they spent most of their time with their blood relations and friends. Replace the word
than
Furthermore
, they valued ther
relatives over money. Correct your spelling
their
the
In contrast
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nowadays
nowaday
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nowadays
people
are focusing their
professions due to technological advancement that requires more working hours and keep them Change preposition
on their
oocupied
. Indeed, that contributes to Correct your spelling
occupied
keep
them away to build Change the verb form
keeping
strong
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a strong
connection
with friends and family Fix the agreement mistake
connections
member
.
By considering all the aforementioned reasons, Fix the agreement mistake
members
the
self-satisfaction and happiness can be brought neither by luxuries nor by having Correct article usage
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highest
heighest
post in any profession. Every living human being needs connection with relations to Correct article usage
the heighest
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remain
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and peacefulCorrect your spelling
healthy
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