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students are becoming more and more reliant on the internet. while the internet is convenient, it has many negative effects and its use for educational purposes should be restricted. how far do you agree with this statement?

#students #internet #effects #purposes
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 contemporary world, advancement in technology made pupils life more facilitate and,
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 time;
however
, some think that it is very convenient to
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student
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,
thus
 it would be banned for education purpose. In my opinion, it gives more fruitful outcome to
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 it for
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learning
.
Firstly
,
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 has
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 of information, which adolescents can easily
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acquire
 from anywhere and anytime.
Secondly
, they can learn from home without any
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obligation
 and disturbance. To
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illustrate
, in India,
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 pandemic all
student
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 learn from
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 and it
reaveals
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reveals
 that they obtain 20% extra knowledge from extra classes.
Moreover
, animation
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technology
 makes learning more
intersting
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interesting
 than offline classes.
In addition
,
internet
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 has all the answer for doubt,
therefore
 pupils could mitigate their problem with-in-
second
;
hence
, it is less time consuming and
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 the efficiency of learning.
Furthermore
, verbal classes from online are
also
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easy
 to evaluate because it is pre-recorded, so
wstudent
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students
 can not miss any lecture and attend that anytime. To conclude
internet
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 has
vast
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 amount of information, which can improve
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 knowledge of pupils. In my opinion,
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 for educational
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 should not be banned because it is far more convenient
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