Some people say that parents should encourage their children to take part in organised group activities in their free time. Others say that it is important for children to learn how to occupy themseleves on their own. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
In
this
contemporary era, parents
are worried about their children
future
. Most people say that parents
need to think about their children
activities
and encourage them while others say that it is every student responsibility to think about their own future
and engage themselves in their favourite activity that help
them to achieve their Change the verb form
helps
future
goals. I strongly agree with the latter notion. In this
essay, I will discuss these in the details
with examples.
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detail
Firstly
, parents
should interfere in the children
life
because in
Add the comma(s)
,in
this
way, they know what their children
are doing in their life
? and encourage their children
to participate in cultural or any group activities
. For example
, In the survey that conducted by the Ryan school in
the Change preposition
apply
last
year. They found that if parents
are looking on
their child Change preposition
at
activities
and help them to motivate, those children
perform very well in their academic and cultural activities
whereas those are not interfering in their kid’s life
then
they performed very poorly. So that, parent motivation is an essential Correct your spelling
thing
think
in every child Correct your spelling
thing
life
.
Second
, pupils should be aware about
their Change the preposition
of
future
and think what
kinds of Change preposition
about what
activities
helping them to achieve the
goals and fulfil their dream? Change the word
their
In addition
, Add an article
the student
a student
student
should take Fix the agreement mistake
students
participation
in their interesting fields and work towards their targets, if required take additional help or guidance. Replace the word
participate
For instance
, if student
decided that he want to be a software engineer Add an article
a student
then
he picks the computer science subjects after his schooling. In this
way, he can get his dream job and work in multi-national companies. Therefore
, candidates should be conscious about their tomorrow.
In conclusion, parents
guidance and encouragement always be helpful for children
and motivate them instead
of this
, pupils should also
take care about their tomorrow and think towards that direction. In my opinion, students should first
think for
their destiny, if required take others help. But Change preposition
about
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children
children's
childrens
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