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Some people say that parents should encourage their children to take part in organised group activities in their free time. Others say that it is important for children to learn how to occupy themseleves on their own. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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In
this
 contemporary era,
parents
 are worried about their
children
future
. Most people say that
parents
 need to think about their
children
activities
 and encourage them while others say that it is every student responsibility to think about their own
future
 and engage themselves in their favourite activity that
help
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 them to achieve their
future
 goals. I strongly agree with the latter notion. In
this
 essay, I will discuss these in the
details
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 with examples.
Firstly
,
parents
 should interfere in the
children
life
 because
in
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,in
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this
 way, they know what their
children
 are doing in their
life
? and encourage their
children
 to participate in cultural or any group
activities
.
For example
, In the survey that conducted by the Ryan school
in
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the
last
 year. They found that if
parents
 are looking
on
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at
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 their child
activities
 and help them to motivate, those
children
 perform very well in their academic and cultural
activities
 whereas those are not interfering in their kid’s
life
then
 they performed very poorly. So that, parent motivation is an essential
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thing
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think
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 in every child
life
.
Second
, pupils should be aware
about
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of
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 their
future
 and think
what
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about what
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 kinds of
activities
 helping them to achieve
the
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their
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 goals and fulfil their dream?
In addition
,
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the student
a student
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student
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students
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 should take
participation
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participate
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 in their interesting fields and work towards their targets, if required take additional help or guidance.
For instance
, if
student
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a student
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 decided that he want to be a software engineer
then
 he picks the computer science subjects after his schooling. In
this
 way, he can get his dream job and work in multi-national companies.
Therefore
, candidates should be conscious about their tomorrow. In conclusion,
parents
 guidance and encouragement always be helpful for
children
 and motivate them
instead
 of
this
, pupils should
also
 take care about their tomorrow and think towards that direction. In my opinion, students should
first
 think
for
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 their destiny, if required take others help. But
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children
children's
childrens
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children
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 should
first
 take a step ahead.
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