You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graphs below show the enrolments of overseas students and local students in Australian universities over a ten year period. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The graphs below show the enrolments of overseas students and local students in Australian universities over a ten year period.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

You should write at least 150 words.
These graphs, recorded overseas and local
students
respectively, show the change
of
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in
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the
number
of
students
in
Australian
universities
from 2001 to 2010. About
oversears
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overseas
overseers
students
, in 2001, there are nearly 20000 overseas
students
totally in
Australian
universities
, where nearly 10000 of them were commencing
students
. The total and commencing
number
of
students
were
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was
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increasing year by year
in
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at
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a
similiar
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similar
speed. In 2009, the
amount
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number
show examples
of total
students
in
Australian
universities
was
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were
show examples
close to 80000 and the
commencing
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number of commencing
show examples
students
was
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were
show examples
nearly 40000. In 2010, the speeds of the increasing
number
both slow down. The
number
of total
students
just
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was just
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plus 1000-2000 and the
number
of commencing
students
was less than 1000.
On the other hand
, about the
number
local
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of local
show examples
students
. In 2001, there are nearly 400000
students
in
Australian
universities
and 200000 of them
was
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were
show examples
the
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apply
show examples
commencing
students
. The
number
of
commerncing
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commencing
students
varied
in
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to
show examples
200000
level
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levels
show examples
in the
next
ten
year
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years
show examples
. Meanwhile, the
number
of total
studetns
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students
was increase
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was increased
was increasing
show examples
to 600000 in 2007
,
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apply
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and seemed
kept
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to keep
show examples
in
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at
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the same level
in
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apply
show examples
the
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apply
show examples
after three years.
Overall
, the total
number
of university
students
in Australia increased from 2001 to 2010. The total
number
of local
students
was more than the
overseas
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number of overseas
show examples
students
in
this
period.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, number, australian, universities with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.

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  • enrolments
  • trend
  • peak
  • trough
  • comparative analysis
  • surpassed
  • dominant
  • fluctuations
  • stability
  • growth
  • decline
  • significant
  • notable
  • shift
  • influence
  • predict
  • impact
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