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In many countries, old or traditional languages are dying out or being forgotten, especially by younger people. Is this an acceptable development which occurs inevitably, or is it something which we should try to prevent?

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Nowadays, especially among
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, ancient traditional languages are becoming extinct all around the globe.
This
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 and reach a concluding view. On the one hand, in today’s age of globalization, those who support that it is adaptable evolution that happens spontaneously say that learning
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language
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 used by the world is more important than anything else to keep pace with the times.
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, proponents
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 that bilinguals have access to better job positions and earn higher salaries.
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, parents prefer learning English
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 of the
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Mongolian's
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 traditional
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 for their kids. Numerous English
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 are a clear example of the demand of the community.
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, critics who believe traditional
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 needs to be protected claim that for a nation to preserve its heritage
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every citizen from an early age would need to study national
language
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 through a specific detailed curriculum.
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, opponents point
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 authorities should support these programs through particular activities.
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,
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 would have to be set thresholds for the mandatory Mongolian
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 and writing examinations for students taking the general entrance examination, students would study more responsibility. In conclusion, it could be essential to learn a new world
language
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 and to keep abreast of times in the modern world.
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, we should not neglect our own
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 to maintain national culture. It seems that respect for the ancient
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 is not old-fashioned, and it is vital to pass it on to future generations.

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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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