Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future.Such as those related to science and technology.

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subjects
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for their profession. numerous people have
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opinion that University
students
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the learners can
study
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their
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their outcomes will be proficient. Despite
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college
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become more competent because of their confidence in their
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lock horns in the competition. Meanwhile their concentration and motivation level will be far beyond.
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to
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his passion through studies , he will definitely be a good tourist guide in
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students
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will
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engineer and having a good income so, humans
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only in that way their carrier is best meanwhile,
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sibling is forced to
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the same .Henceforth, the authorities should make the compulsory
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they have to
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the
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • foster
  • engagement
  • excel
  • innovative contributions
  • diversity in research
  • well-rounded education
  • broad perspectives
  • critical thinking skills
  • mental well-being
  • burnout
  • forced academic paths
  • job-ready
  • skills shortages
  • tech-driven economy
  • employment rates
  • changing job market
  • utilitarian subjects
  • aptitudes
  • wasting talent
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