Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future.Such as those related to science and technology.

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for their profession. numerous people have
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opinion that University
students
should
study
whatever they want to learn.
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, by
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the learners can
study
with full zest and zeal due to their high passion
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their outcomes will be proficient. Despite
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lock horns in the competition. Meanwhile their concentration and motivation level will be far beyond.
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subjects
it will lead to boost the
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morale which results in
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they can be capable to achieve their targets.
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to
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his passion through studies , he will definitely be a good tourist guide in
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that the
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students
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be helpful in the coming years in regards to science and technology. they think that the individual
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subjects
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engineer and having a good income so, humans
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only in that way their carrier is best meanwhile,
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sibling is forced to
study
the same .Henceforth, the authorities should make the compulsory
subjects
in the universities by
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they have to
study
those
subjects
.
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ESSAY ARGUED THAT THE
COLLEGE
GOING
STUDENTS
WHO ARE FREE TO ADOPT THE
SUBJECTS
OF THEIR OWN CHOICE, they perform better in studies and happy.
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are forcefully choose
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the
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are stressed and unhappy. In my opinion, the
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

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  • Prediction or recommendation

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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