Some people argue that is more important to have an enjoyable job than to earn a lot of money. Others disagree and think that a good salary leads to a better life. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

It is often argued that
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Job
which we desire makes us happy when compared with good pay. While
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Others think that life becomes better when we earn handsome of money. In my opinion,
high
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salary may
makes
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life easier but
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job
is way better. To
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embark
on, Currently, Every individual requires a
job
for
living
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.
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women are
also
intrested
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interested
to do
jobs
and stand on their own.
However
, many
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people are picking up
jobs
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are not based on their particular stream because of good pay. At
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it may
makes
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them happy but later
on
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they will lose
intrest
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interest
and couldn't be productive.
For example
, At present many students are choosing engineering which is a great stream but there are no sufficient
jobs
due to overpopulation. So, many of them are moving towards different
jobs
like
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, paramedical and taking over their family business in which they
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less interest. They may make better pay but they are not happy and satisfied in the particular field. Whereas, Some individuals work in their specific streams even they get less pay because it makes them
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jubilant
. They just wait for their turn
untill
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until
they get
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in
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interested
intrested
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field rather than working in other fields.
For instance
, One of my
cousin
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has studied computer science and has more
intrest
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interest
in hacking but he got a
job
as a coder which has
a
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good pay. At
first
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he got bewildered.
However
, he rejected it and waited for his ideal
job
eventhough
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even though
there is
lot
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of pressure from
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his family
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. Now, he is very productive and has
a
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best pay when compared with their
collegues
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colleagues
. To sum up, Different kinds of
jobs
may be available in the market with outstanding pay but In my opinion, opting
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jobs
makes us happy and satisfied rather than
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a job
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with good pay.
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