Some people argue that is more important to have an enjoyable job than to earn a lot of money. Others disagree and think that a good salary leads to a better life. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

It is often argued that

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which we desire makes us happy when compared with good pay. While

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Others think that life becomes better when we earn handsome of money. In my opinion,

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life easier but

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is way better. To

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on, Currently, Every individual requires a

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for

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women are

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interested

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and stand on their own.

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people are picking up

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are not based on their particular stream because of good pay. At

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it may

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them happy but later

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they will lose

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, At present many students are choosing engineering which is a great stream but there are no sufficient

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due to overpopulation. So, many of them are moving towards different

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, paramedical and taking over their family business in which they

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less interest. They may make better pay but they are not happy and satisfied in the particular field. Whereas, Some individuals work in their specific streams even they get less pay because it makes them

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. They just wait for their turn

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until

they get

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field rather than working in other fields.

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has studied computer science and has more

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in hacking but he got a

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as a coder which has

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good pay. At

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he got bewildered.

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, he rejected it and waited for his ideal

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eventhough

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of pressure from

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. Now, he is very productive and has

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best pay when compared with their

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. To sum up, Different kinds of

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may be available in the market with outstanding pay but In my opinion, opting

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jobs

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makes us happy and satisfied rather than

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with good pay.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Some people argue that is more important to have an enjoyable job than to earn a lot of money. Others disagree and think that a good salary leads to a better life. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

Some parents give their children everything that they ask for, and allow them to do what they want. Is this good for children? What could be the consequences for these children when they grow up?

Some people think that it is necessary to travel to learn about other countries. Others feel same can be learnt through TV and internet. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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In some countries owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

Q. People who go to live in other countries, should follow the customs and traditions of the new country. To what extent do you agree or disagree?