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Some people argue that is more important to have an enjoyable job than to earn a lot of money. Others disagree and think that a good salary leads to a better life. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

#people #job #money #salary #life
It is often argued that
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Job
 which we desire makes us happy when compared with good pay. While
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 Others think that life becomes better when we earn handsome of money. In my opinion,
high
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 salary may
makes
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 life easier but
desirable
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job
 is way better. To
embrak
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embark
 on, Currently, Every individual requires a
job
 for
living
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.
Now a days
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 women are
also
intrested
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interested
 to do
jobs
 and stand on their own.
However
, many
of
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the
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people are picking up
jobs
which
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 are not based on their particular stream because of good pay. At
first
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 it may
makes
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 them happy but later
on
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 they will lose
intrest
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interest
 and couldn't be productive.
For example
, At present many students are choosing engineering which is a great stream but there are no sufficient
jobs
 due to overpopulation. So, many of them are moving towards different
jobs
 like
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center
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, paramedical and taking over their family business in which they
has
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 less interest. They may make better pay but they are not happy and satisfied in the particular field. Whereas, Some individuals work in their specific streams even they get less pay because it makes them
jublient
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jubilant
. They just wait for their turn
untill
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until
 they get
job
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a job
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 in
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interested
intrested
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an intrested
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 field rather than working in other fields.
For instance
, One of my
cousin
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 has studied computer science and has more
intrest
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interest
 in hacking but he got a
job
 as a coder which has
a
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good pay. At
first
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 he got bewildered.
However
, he rejected it and waited for his ideal
job
eventhough
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even though
 there is
lot
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a lot
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 of pressure from
family
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his family
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. Now, he is very productive and has
a
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 best pay when compared with their
collegues
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colleagues
. To sum up, Different kinds of
jobs
 may be available in the market with outstanding pay but In my opinion, opting
desired
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jobs
 makes us happy and satisfied rather than
job
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a job
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 with good pay.
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