Some feel executives in large companies should receive high salaries while others think they are paid too much compared to ordinary workers. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

It is often argued that management
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in huge firms
gains
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a high income whilst others say that administrators get more money than their employees.
While
labourers are dissatisfied with their salary in comparison with the principal, I strongly believe that it is justified that managers deserve a high wage because they face a lot of problems and must cope with them. On the one hand, labourers perform a lot of tasks, but earnings do not correspond to their number of jobs. Performing many assignments ordinary staff members are inclined to think that they deserve a high paid salary, because, in
this
way, many energies and effort are spent by
workers
in order to complete their job tasks.
For instance
, in
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company named, Alga all the
work
are done by an ordinary specialist, which includes different kind of surveys,
such
as levelling, GPS shooting etc.
However
, I consider that the specialists do not face plenty of pressure during their
work
, because they perform their usual assignment
according to
an action plan.
On the other hand
,
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, as a rule,
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with the problems and
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them by working out the schedule. Even though employees carry out many job tasks employers accomplish important and useful
work
in order to organize an appropriate accomplishment of a project or job, so in
this
way, they have a lot of liability, and
this
is the main reason why the managers have had earnings higher than their
workers
.
For example
, in big companies,
such
as Google, Facebook and so on, responsibilities
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all the choices are laid on executives and handle
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all pressure and risks. I believe
this
statement is fair enough because the duties and responsibilities of the directors are more valuable than the same of the
workers
. In conclusion,
although
ordinary
workers
execute many assignments, they do not deserve the same level of salary as their employers because they cope
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with all
pressure
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and must develop a
work
plan in order to achieve goals. The author prefers to adhere to the opinion that says that the heads of large companies have a large income compared to the staff members.Some feel executives in large companies should receive high salaries
while
others think they are paid too much compared to ordinary
workers
. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
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Improve your understanding of the topic and provide a more balanced discussion on both views. Make sure to provide clear and relevant examples to support your ideas. Additionally, work on organizing your ideas more coherently and ensure that your introduction and conclusion effectively address the topic.
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