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Global environment issues are the responsibilities of rich nations not of the poor nation. Do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

#environment #responsibilities #nations #nation
Global environmental problems are on the rise in the
last
 decade. Some are of the opinion that these issues need to be
dealth
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dealt
death
 only by
resource rich
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countries
however
 some people feel all the nations are equally responsible for tackling the problem. I agree that rich
countries
 should play a major role in
this
 but at the same time poor
countries
also
 should be held responsible in certain ways and the below essay will address the arguments in favour. Global warming is threatening the lives of
entire
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the entire
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 world population. Recently there was
a
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an
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 unseen
heat wave
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heatwave
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 involving Canada,
USA
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the USA
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 and
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Middle
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middle
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the middle
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 East
countries
 resulting in the death of many citizens.
Thus
 it is the duty of
the
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all the developed nations to come forward and create an association among themselves to address the issue as well as come forward with a solution. Many
countries
 have already passed stringent rules to protect the environment and one of them being
use
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 of electric
car
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instead
 of fossil
fuel based
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 vehicles. At the same time developing and underdeveloped nations should extend their support to
this
 development by enforcement of laws to curb
the
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pollution. In
india
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India
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 new government has made
mandatory
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it mandatory
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 for all older vehicles to undergo recycling after 15 years, provided tax benefits and concession on electric vehicles with conservation of trees and forest. In conclusion, each country should do everything possible to improve global environmental issues and it is not only the government,
even the people are
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but even the people are also
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 equally responsible for solving the problems.
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