As countries become more developed, many fast food outlets move into the country giving local people greater access to fast food. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

Many
fast
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food
brands
such
as KFC or burger king target various developing economies because these markets are quite lucrative for them. Even though easy access to fast
food
has the benefit of being quick convenient and tasty, it can lead to various health problems
that
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its major drawback. On one hand, due to the fact that the nation is developing many
people
are working multiple or strenuous jobs and simply do not have the time to cook.
Therefore
, they opt for fast
food
which does not take lengthy preparation time and is extremely delicious.
For instance
, skipping breakfast is very common for busy
people
so, on their way to
office
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they pick up fast
food
because it is easily available. Alternatively, a major disadvantage of fast
food
is that it leads to health problems
such
as obesity, depression, heart diseases and promotes sedentary lifestyles.
Moreover
, Fast
food
can be highly addictive. To add to it, high consumption of fast
food
is the number one cause of obesity among
people
because of
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amount of artificial sugar, carbohydrates and processed meat.
In addition
, regular consumption not only leads to obesity but
also
leads to internal diseases
such
as
fatty
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liver. Poor bodily functions and high consumption of oil content leads to hormonal imbalance and depression.
Moreover
, the most alarming fact is that
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stated above fast
food
is highly addictive due to its taste. All of these symptoms
further
lead to
sedentary
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lifestyle.
This
means that even though the person is eating he/she will still feel
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. To conclude, fast
food
usage is increasing in progressing nations due to its availability and affordability
however
, it plays a key role in deteriorating the health of
people
.
Therefore
, we can easily argue that the drawback of consuming fast
food
is greater than the benefit.
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