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As countries become more developed, many fast food outlets move into the country giving local people greater access to fast food. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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Many
fast
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food
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 brands
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 as KFC or burger king target various developing economies because these markets are quite lucrative for them. Even though easy access to fast
food
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 has the benefit of being quick convenient and tasty, it can lead to various health problems
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 its major drawback. On one hand, due to the fact that the nation is developing many
people
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 are working multiple or strenuous jobs and simply do not have the time to cook.
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, they opt for fast
food
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 which does not take lengthy preparation time and is extremely delicious.
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, skipping breakfast is very common for busy
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 so, on their way to
office
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 they pick up fast
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 because it is easily available. Alternatively, a major disadvantage of fast
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 is that it leads to health problems
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 as obesity, depression, heart diseases and promotes sedentary lifestyles.
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, Fast
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 can be highly addictive. To add to it, high consumption of fast
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 is the number one cause of obesity among
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 amount of artificial sugar, carbohydrates and processed meat.
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, regular consumption not only leads to obesity but
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 leads to internal diseases
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fatty
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 liver. Poor bodily functions and high consumption of oil content leads to hormonal imbalance and depression.
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, the most alarming fact is that
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 stated above fast
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 is highly addictive due to its taste. All of these symptoms
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 lead to
sedentary
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a sedentary
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 lifestyle.
This
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 means that even though the person is eating he/she will still feel
weakness
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. To conclude, fast
food
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 usage is increasing in progressing nations due to its availability and affordability
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, it plays a key role in deteriorating the health of
people
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.
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, we can easily argue that the drawback of consuming fast
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 is greater than the benefit.
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