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Social media is becoming increasingly popular amongst all age groups. However, sharing personal information on social media websites does have risks. Do you think that the advantages of social media outweigh the disadvantages?

#media #age #groups #information #websites #risks
Nowadays,
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 is rapidly changing the lives of people around the world and creating
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 demand for all different levels of people in society.
In contrast
,
website
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a website
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 can create issues if
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use
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 it in undue ways. I strongly agree the cons outweigh the
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bonus
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. The following paragraph
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 both advantage and disadvantages and reach a reasonable conclusion.
To begin
 with, social media is more useful and beneficial in
term
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terms
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 of gaining information and become more accessible as well for many users
such
 as
student
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students
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,
teacher
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teachers
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, and
researcher
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researchers
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. To illustrate more, teachers have magnificent tools to use
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during class time and that can help to deliver the ideas more clearly.
Moreover
,
commutation
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 plays a vital role for surfers and encourage them to explore their target either to find
better
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 job or build up great connection with cooperator for trade purposes.
Furthermore
, the internet all user to buy many goods through the internet, based that, consumers have
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 to evaluate products and choose from
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 of
website
 can display
this
 with reasonable price.
For instance
, customers add their comments on the products to help commercial companies to improve their services and apply
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in
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good
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 price.
On the other hand
, others believe that
website
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websites
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 can damage kids’ mentality. To clarify, it is easy for them to spend more than 3 hours without any break. As result,
this
 is reflected
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 they become likely addicted. Parents have full
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 to guides their youngsters and limit their time by useful activities like excise, football, and basketball. In conclusion, after analyzing both
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 of
this
 topic it is not hard to see that the advantages exceed the disadvantages. Social media enhanced consumers to connect more to have great access to information and more
communicate
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communication
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 with others.
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