Men do most of the high-level jobs. Should the government encourage a certain percentage of these jobs to be reserved for women? What is your opinion on that?

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the topic of
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level
jobs
and whether a certain amount of
reservations
should be made for
women
for these
jobs
, my opinion is on the negative side. I don't agree with the suggestion mentioned above as
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I feel that having
reservations
demoralizes both
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genders. Some men would think that they deserve the position but blame the government as if the
reservations
has cost them their position. Whilst,
women
can
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the
reservations
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capabilities of them reaching their potential would be hindered.
Furthermore
, the preparation for high-
level
jobs
starts at a very young age where kids learn about leadership, management, organization, planning, confidence, etc. during their day to day lives in school and other activities they are involved in. These traits are the backbone of any
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level
job which are irrespective of any gender.
Instead
of having
reservations
, encouraging
women
involvement
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high
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level
jobs
can be increased in various ways. Some of them include but not limited to are spreading awareness about how
a
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women
can influence
the
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high
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level
jobs
, by increasing certain incentives, by having equal pays as
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men etc.
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