Some countries today have passed laws against smoking tobacco in public buildings such as offices and restaurants. Other countries have no intention of doing this. Consider the possible arguments on both sides of this debate, and reach your own conclusion on which side you favor

Nowadays, some country's government has approved the tobacco
law
that smokers shouldn't
smoke
in
the
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public places namely work,
restaurant
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restaurants

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, and
school
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schools

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.
However
, the issue is not entirely straight forward other
countries
have not the purpose of making
this
. In the following paragraphs, I shall consider both sides of
this
very topical debate. On the one hand, some
countries
concern that the regulation will violate human rights,
also
everyone has the right to do anything that an individual prefers to do, and one of them is to
smoke
in public areas.
This
seems that these
countries
' citizens think that their right to
smoke
is more important than others' right to be healthy. Another argument is who opposite
law
that the benefit coming from the sales of cigarettes makes up most of the state budget, so if they forbade people to
smoke
, it would destroy their economy.
For instance
: Cuba has been globally famous for cigarettes and exports its product to many other
countries
;
this
results in their surges economy.
By contrast
,
countries
which adhere in anti-smoking
law
has reduced exposure to secondhand
smoke
that results in the number of health problems are decreased
such
as heart disease and lung cancer. There is some evidence that the number of heart attacks has been reduced in Singapore and Canada by adopting
smoke
-free workplace laws.
In addition
, employees who are considerably
addicted
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to cigarettes negatively affect job productivity long-term, losing
labor
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time due to
smoke
breaks and absenteeism.
For example
, there is universal consensus that smokers less productive than a nonsmoker.
Finally
, it appears that the restriction
also
decreases costs, that if
countries
comprehensive
smoke
-free indoor air policies, the company's cleaning, maintenance expenses would be downed. In conclusion, I agree that
this
law
can indeed be a valuable activity, with improving health, productivity and, increase company's profit.
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