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Some countries today have passed laws against smoking tobacco in public buildings such as offices and restaurants. Other countries have no intention of doing this. Consider the possible arguments on both sides of this debate, and reach your own conclusion on which side you favor

Nowadays, some country's government has approved the tobacco
law
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 that smokers
shouldn
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should
't
smoke
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 in
the
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public places namely work, restaurant, and school.
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, the issue is not entirely
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forward
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other
countries
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 not the purpose of making
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. In the following paragraphs, I shall consider both sides of
this
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 very topical debate. On the one hand, some
countries
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concern
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 that the regulation will violate human rights,
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 everyone has the right to do anything that an individual prefers to do, and one of them is to
smoke
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 in public areas.
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 seems that these
countries
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' citizens think that their right to
smoke
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 is more important than others' right to be healthy. Another argument is who opposite
law
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 that the benefit coming from the sales of cigarettes makes up most of the state budget, so if they forbade people to
smoke
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, it would destroy their economy.
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: Cuba has been globally famous for cigarettes and exports its product to many other
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;
this
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 results in their surges economy.
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,
countries
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 which adhere
in
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 anti-smoking
law
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 has reduced exposure to secondhand
smoke
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that
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results
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the
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 number of health problems
are decreased
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 as heart disease and lung cancer. There is some evidence that the number of heart attacks has been reduced in Singapore and Canada by adopting
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-free workplace laws.
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, employees who are considerably addicted to cigarettes negatively affect job productivity long-term, losing
labor
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 time
due to
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smoke
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 breaks and absenteeism.
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, there is
universal
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 consensus that smokers
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less productive than a nonsmoker.
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, it appears that the restriction
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 decreases costs, that if
countries
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comprehensive
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smoke
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-free indoor air policies, the company's cleaning,
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and maintenance
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maintenance
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and maintenance
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 expenses would be downed. In conclusion, I agree that
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law
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 can indeed be a valuable activity,
with
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improving health,
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and
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productivity and,
increase
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increasing
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company
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the company
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's profit.

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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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