these days people work in more than one job, and often change career serveal times during their life . what are the advantage and disadvantage of this?

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Nowadays, everyone wants a better
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life style
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, a high salary and a lavish
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. Many people try discrepancy jobs or they do more than one job.
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why pupils try to change their career as well as do twice or thrice
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in a week and some of the challenges to be overcome. Let's begin by looking at the advantages of MULTIPLE jobs. one of the main
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of you become confident about yourself. what
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mean by
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is that in
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modern world money is
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, if you are working everyone shows their respect and you feel great about yourself. it motivates your confidence
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you can handle your
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without any opt from someone.
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,
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people change their career to follow their passion. Take Bollywood's actor Sushant
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for an example. He was
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pursuing
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his career as
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engineer but he takes a chance and learnt acting and become
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actor in the
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industry and he did so many
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beautiful
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in his
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, if you follow your dreams you get fame, money, and success but more importantly you cheerful and satisfied in your
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. Turning to
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side of the argument, you feel socially
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, to be more precise, you don't have time for your family and friends because of the back to back work and you don't have time for social
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.
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you become annoying and you feel
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tried
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all the time and it affects your reclusive
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often
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to alone and you gonna
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from
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society. All thing considered, Follow
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dream never easy. you need to weigh up the
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the
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better lifestyle, success and so on, and the cons of live private
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from society.
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i
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believe the benefits in terms of personal growth eventually
outweight
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outweigh
any negatives.
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