Social media is becoming increasingly popular amongst all age groups. However, sharing personal information on social media websites does have risks. Do you think that the advantages of social media outweigh the disadvantages?

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Nowadays, social networking become rapidly changing the lives of
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around the world and creating
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demand for all different levels of
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in society. Some
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that it has several drawbacks if
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use it in undue ways and share personal data. I strongly agree that the cons outweigh the pros. The following paragraphs discuss both advantages and disadvantages and reach a reasonable conclusion.
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with, there are many benefits
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using social media. It
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more useful and beneficial in terms of gaining information and enable
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the user
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user
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to communicate well with each other among
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. To illustrate more, through those applications’ official institutions in developed
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can use
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as magnificent tools to announce the latest news or regulations via those channels.
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, it is likely supported the citizen to interact and compline about through applications
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as Facebook, Twitter, Instagram, and Snapchat.
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, social networking has its drawbacks, to clarify, many influencers share the personal
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with followers which lead to increase their income and encourage others to follow their trend and the way of lifestyle.
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,
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who have high revenues love to spend
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of days in a luxury hotel, fancy car and wearing expensive
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cloths
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.
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, sharing details
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life
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will allow thieves to do many crimes
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as smuggling and
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. As result, the more sharing personal
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the more you get murder In conclusion, after analyzing both
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of
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topic it is not hard to see that the advantages exceed the disadvantages. Social media enhanced consumers to connect more to have great access to information and more
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with others.
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should careful not to share their personal
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publicly.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Social media platforms
  • Connectivity
  • Self-expression
  • Creativity
  • Global communication
  • Instantaneous communication
  • Personal growth
  • Career advancement
  • Privacy concerns
  • Identity theft
  • Cyberbullying
  • Addiction
  • Productivity
  • Misinformation
  • Crisis
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