Some countries today have passed law against smoking tobacco in public buildings such as offices and restaurants. Other countries have intention of doing this. Consider the possible arguments on both sides of this debate, and reach your own conclusion on which side you favor.

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Nowadays, smoking in public places has been prohibited in some

countries

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others

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thought it was unnecessary. In

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both sides of

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view. On the one hand, critics of tobacco restriction in public places promote the idea that smoking

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on personal choice. Citizens of those

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think that they should have

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freedom to smoke

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anywhere they want.

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, some

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believe that

smoke

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in public

area

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can lead to economic improvement. Evidence from many

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shows that

countries

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allow

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people to smoke in public areas sell more than other

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, supporters of anti-tobacco

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claim that smoking in public places may infringe on the right of

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to live a healthy life.

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health organization

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shows that cigarettes are not only harmful to smokers but

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harmful to

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is to say that if someone is smoking in offices and restaurants, people who sit around could be in

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, for the

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that don’t produce cigarettes,

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of it could be relatively higher than self-producing

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import

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tobacco should pay import taxes,

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it cannot be

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friendly.

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smoking is one of the

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reasons causes air pollution.

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there are many reasons to pollute the air,

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pollution from tobacco can not be ignored.

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, It seems that smoking in public may disturb

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and have

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impact on air pollution.

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anti-cigarettes law will be preferable.

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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

Paragraph 1 - Introduction
Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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256 words

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Some countries today have passed law against smoking tobacco in public buildings such as offices and restaurants. Other countries have intention of doing this. Consider the possible arguments on both sides of this debate, and reach your own conclusion on which side you favor.

Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

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Some people think that children should begin their formal education at a very early age. Others think they should begin after 7 years of age. Discuss both views and give your own opinion