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Global environment issues are the responsibilities of rich nations not of the poor nation. Do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

#environment #responsibilities #nations #nation
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Global environmental
issues
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has
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 drawn attention to
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Governments all over the world. Rich
nations
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 are fully responsible
to
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 these
issues
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 is debatable.
This
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dicuss
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discuss
 why both wealthy and poor
countries
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 should
responsible
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to
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 that. Rich
nations
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 should take
in
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charge of
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global environmental
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. Those areas are normally producing
large
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amount
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amounts
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 of pollutions in order to maintain economic activities. Human activities in wealthy areas,
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 as running factories,
traffics
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 and
electricity generating
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, are producing
huge
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amount
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amounts
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 of pollutants when
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 to the undeveloped
countries
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.
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, it is reasonable to ask the problem makers, the developed
countries
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, to take
responsibilities
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responsibility
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on
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 global environmental
issues
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.
Besides
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, in order to handle the
environment
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environmental
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problems
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, regulations and fundings are essential, which leads back to the wealthy governments to
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to
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.
Although
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 some of the regulations can stop the
prodution
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production
 of excessive pollutions due to
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human activities, rewarding systems, which require money, will be more effective.
Public
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 tends to accept rewarding systems than
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regulation as laws does not benefit them.
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, solving the
exsiting
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existing
exciting
 environmental
issues
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 always costs
billions
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 dollars,
such
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 as the
the
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cost of collecting ocean garbage is over billions.
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, scientific
reasearches
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researchers
 and
inovations
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innovations
 for these
problems
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 require
a
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considerable funding in order to get to best result.
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, solving
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 could not be accomplished without money, which undeveloped
countries
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 don't have.
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, the
third
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 world
coutries
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countries
 should
also
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 bear a part of the responsibilities on global environmental
issues
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,
such
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 as education. Those government should educate their people
how
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on how
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 to conserve energy and resources.
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, the way they use in agriculture should
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 be improved, as over-
havesting
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harvesting
 and
mispracticing
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practising
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method
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methods
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 would lead to different environmental
problems
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, like deforestation. Undeveloped
nations
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 can
also
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 contribute
on
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to
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 environmental
issues
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. In conclusion, both rich and poor
nations
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 should
responsible
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respond
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to
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for
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 the global environmental
issues
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 where the wealthies' should contribute more
efford
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effort
 than the
poors
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poor
. We are all sharing the same Earth,
hence
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, why don't
everone
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everyone
 takes
responsibilities
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of
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 it?
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