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Some people believe that a police force carrying guns will encourage a higher level of violence in society. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The society we live in today has experienced an increasing rate of violence
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 rioting, common theft, burglary and domestic abuse for
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 few decades.
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guns
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 were introduced to mitigate these problems, some people claim that
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 is a counter-productive measure and promote more disturbances. I am of the opinion that
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 should be carried by
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special
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 group of
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officers
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 and general
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officers
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 should not carry
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 of reasons. It is claimed that few
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officers
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 treat people differently based on their racial profile because they are biased by the previous crime rate
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 that community. When the
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police-
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officers
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 carry
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, they are obliged to use them in crisis situations where they have to react very quickly, to prevent innocent people and for their own
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. It has been found out from previous case studies and video
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 that many
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officers
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 could not take
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 decisions at crucial moments and used their biased prejudices which cost innocent lives. These created anger in some marginalized societies. On the
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, there are some situations
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 as women, child and drug trafficking, require an armed
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 for who can deter the criminals. Some organized crime
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 will take advantage of the fact that
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 do not carry
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, will destroy the harmony of peace in
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society. In summary, I strongly believe that community
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 should not carry
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 and it should be carried by specially trained
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officers
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 who will only act when
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benefit
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 outweigh the damages. Policing should be a friendly image on people’s
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 not someone carrying
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • law enforcement
  • escalate
  • deter
  • overreaction
  • perceived safety
  • misuse of power
  • deterrent effect
  • law and order
  • public safety
  • crime prevention
  • civil liberties
  • use of lethal force
  • accountability
  • arms race
  • militarization
  • social fabric
  • statistical evidence
  • cultural attitudes
  • criminal behavior
  • policy implications
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