Some people believe that educational success depends on good teacher other think that its depends on the attitude of the studnet. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Education plays the most crucial and vital
role
in building the minds and souls of children. The topic of
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of
student
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education has been raising a lot of debates. A set of persons believes that
this
progress relies on the professional tutor.
On the contrary
, others insist on the opinion that it depends completely on a
child
, how he grasps and takes his learnings. Viewing from a general perspective, the essay discusses both viewpoints, I personally agree with the former for the following reasons. Since
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ancient times, right from the epic period of Mahabharat, scripted in Hindu literature, it is evident that the
role
of a professor or a "Guru" plays the most crucial
role
in the upbringing of a
child
. As they are responsible for the correct guidance and training them , the
student
builds
a
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confidence to achieve his dreams. A
child
learns how to tackle a problem, how those learnings
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applied in
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practical
life
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day one when he meets a good professor who understands the powers and the drawbacks of the
student
. The skills taught by the tutors are
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life
-long learnings
which
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a
student
cannot grab from any other person. On the flip side,
although
it cannot be denied that even if a
child
gets the best of best opportunities to learn from the top professors,
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the end it depends completely on the
child
's wish and how he takes it. Nowadays, there has been a lot of competition, right from the admissions of a toddler
till
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his higher education.
Alongwith
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that the number of students is increasing. With
this
increasing demand, the
number of
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student
-teacher
ratio
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is growing wide.
Hence
the
student
is not able to get one on one lessons from a teacher except solving his doubts. And ultimately
student
is forced to cope-up everything in his own manner. Yet some brilliant minds achieve success
this
way, by experiencing everything on their own and learning from their sour results. The best of the teacher cannot dive inside a person's mind. It depends on the individuals how they take the lessons in their
life
. To recapitulate, though the progress of
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life
needs someone for proper guidance, it is undeniable that
also
depends on his way of taking the lesson. I agree with the
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role
of a career builder who understands the
child
fully, and
also
can be considered superior to a parent, in the
child
's
life
.
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