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Popular hobbies and interests change over time and are more a reflection of trends and fashions than an indication of what individuals really want to do in their spare time. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is acknowledgeable that some leisure
activities
 become fashionable for a short
time
 and
then
 disappear when a new trend comes along, whereas others seem to be perennially popular. From my point of view, I can
therefore
 only partly agree with the assertion that hobbies reflect changing fashions rather than our true interests. On the one hand, some
people
 see hobbies as simply passing trends. Children and teenagers,
in particular
, are often attracted to whatever activity is currently popular among their peers. My 10-year-old niece,
for example
, seems to have a new interest every month, as she joins in with the latest craze that sweeps through her primary school. Over the
last
 year or so, she has been obsessed with Rubik’s cubes, fidget spinners,
squidgies
Correct your spelling
squidgy
 and slime. In a similar way, there have been several different fitness trends for adults over recent years, from jogging to yoga to circuit training and I doubt whether a majority of participants continued to enjoy those
activities
 in the long term.
On the other hand
, there are some
people
 who spend their free
time
 doing popular
activities
 that are far from trendy. A good example of
this
 would be the game chess. Children and adults who enjoy playing chess are certainly not following a new fashion or wasting their
time
 doing something that they do not truly like.
On the contrary
, they are passionate about a game that has existed for hundreds of years and they find it inherently fascinating and absorbing. I would say the same is true about other
activities
 of interest, from reading to swimming. In conclusion, it is apparent that there are numerous acts that
people
 do in a short period of
time
as a result
 of catching trends,
however
, some
people
 take up a hobby because they genuinely enjoy it.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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