Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

With the current trend of globalization and new opportunities ,
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is evolving day by day
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a very fast pace. Some masses believe it is better to accept
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situation
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and go on without changing the conditions whereas opponents believe to work hard and try new
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to improve
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situation. I believe that hard work can change anything and
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should strive for better. On the one hand, trying new
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can be cumbersome for some people .
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who doesn't have any experience in any field
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can be difficult to try out new
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because chances of failure are high.
Secondly
, it can be difficult to change hometown to another place for jobs as it may increase expenditure but income remaining same.
On the other hand
, exploring new
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of a
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which can be beneficial in achieving
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jobs in future . If a
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does a
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and tries to learn new
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it can be very helpful in future.
For instance
, by doing simple
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courses along with
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can enhance the skills of a
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and they can certainly look for another job along with it to improve income. In conclusion , I would say striving for better conditions should be
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of every individual rather than comprising on
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situation
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • adversity
  • resilience
  • stoicism
  • contentment
  • cope
  • adapt
  • endure
  • persevere
  • settle
  • ambition
  • tenacious
  • determined
  • resourceful
  • optimistic
  • self-improvement
  • proactive
  • initiative
  • transform
  • overcome
  • confront
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