some poeple believe that it is best to accept a bad situation such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Difficult circumstances can occur every day. Certain
people
think that accepting a difficult condition in our
life
is better than trying to enhance that condition,
for
example
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joyless job or lack of money.
This
essay will discuss both sides of the argument in detail and provide evidence as to why attempting to improve the
situation
is better. Some
people
consider that when they have a bad day, or a difficult
situation
they should allow
this
in their
life
and live with
this
. Sometimes
this
may be the case because you can think about your fault or what you did wrong.
However
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this
is not the best
options
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nowadays because in
this
world there are many
people
who can replace you in your work or daily
life
.
Great
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deal of adults and even teenagers assume that currently when we have
such
a
situation
we should try to enhance our skills and find the best way of resolving certain
difficult
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.
This
actively demonstrates that at present there are many
competitor
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and many skilled persons that can take your job or can be more useful than you.
As a
result
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you can lose your job , have
lack
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of
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money or have
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a problem
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problem
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problems
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with your health
as a result
. In
this
case
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the best way of avoiding
such
problems in our
life
are:
firstly
to enhance new skills and
secondly
asking for help. To draw the conclusion , in these days and ages where live many skilled
people
we cannot deal with a bad
situation
, only to try to get better and go on, no matter how difficult it is.
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