The government should invest more money in teaching science than other subjects for a country’s development and progress. To what extent do you agree of disagree?

Science
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field has developed a lot of essential
technology
that can be
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in our day-to-day life. Some parts of society opine that
government
should devote additional funds for teaching
science
. I somewhat agree with the statement,
science
plays an essential part in a
country
's growth but authorities should
also
focus on other fields
such
as
law
and the health sector.
To begin
with, the role of
science
in the education system has benefitted the
country
's economic development and made a better world for people to live
.
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It has been seen that countries with more engineers and researchers have developed with a rapid speed than other nations but it can only be possible with the support of the
government
.
Moreover
,
science
and mathematics
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has
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lead to a hi-tech world where the car runs electrically and electricity from
sun's
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heat.
Science
also
played a crucial role in space exploration from sending satellites into an orbit to seeking life existence on different planets.
For instance
, the Indian
government
has spent a surplus amount of money on
science
and
technology
from educating every child in
science
and mathematics to spending millions on satellite and space exploration.
However
, the world can't be a completely better place just only focusing on one field. The
government
should look towards making
a good lawyers
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and
sociologist
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because they play a crucial part in our society. It
is widely acknowledge
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that
country
with
a
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good
law
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laws
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and
regulation
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is a better place to live and
sociologist
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make the development of society.
For instance
, developed economies like Singapore and Malaysia is ahead in
science
and
technology
but faces
a
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plenty of conflicts regarding unstable political system. To conclude, the
country
's success is in the hands of
science
and
technology
but to make
country
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a better place
its
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it's
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important to focus on other aspects
such
as
law
and social
science
. With the help of the
government
paying attention to each and every field can not only helps countries progress but
also
its
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law
and political system
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