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Some people feel that manufacturers and supermarkets have the responsibility to reduce the amount of packaging of goods. Others argue that customers should avoid buying goods with a lot of packaging. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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One
 of the most controversial issues today is related to the controlling of the quantity of packaging demanded. In
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 am going to discuss
this
 question from both points of view and give my own opinion on the matter. On
one
 side of the
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 there are people who argue that the industries are
responsable
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responsible
of
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 the utilization of wrappings of merchandising. The main reason for believing
that is
 because, during the production, the goods receive the packaging,
then
 the decision of
that is
 exclusive of the manufacturers.
One
 good
ilustration
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illustration
 of
this
 is the packaging of the cereals selling at the supermarkets. It is possible to find
one
 of them packing
one
 by
one
 which
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 a large quantity of plastic.
On the other hand
, exist other
brandings
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 which economise the materials used.
On the other hand
, it is
also
 argued that the clients can avoid
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material wasting if they are
concious
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conscious
 of the issues which are related
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 the excessive
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 of plastics and
cardbord
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cardboard
.
That is
 easily
ilustrated
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illustrated
 by the possibility of choosing products recyclings. Nowadays, people can buy
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 weekly shoppings and carry them
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eco bags
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, dispensing with the
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 of plastic bags. In my opinion, both of the arguments have their merits. On balance,
however
, I tend to agree with the active participation of the consumers. It is better that each person take care of the environment and decide in
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 active way how much waste and garbage he will
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thrown
 away into
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nature.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Sustainability
  • Eco-friendly
  • Carbon footprint
  • Excessive packaging
  • Biodegradable materials
  • Corporate social responsibility
  • Consumer advocacy
  • Environmental stewardship
  • Waste reduction
  • Recycling initiatives
  • Green practices
  • Minimalist lifestyle
  • Resource conservation
  • Sustainable consumption
  • Packaging alternatives
  • Regulatory measures
  • Ethical choices
  • Environmental impact assessment
  • Renewable resources
  • Compostable packaging
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