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Families who do not send their children to government financed schools should not be required to pay taxes that supports universal education. To what extent do you agree .

#families #children #government #schools #taxes #education
Nowadays , privileged families make their children learn at private
schools
instead
 of
government
schools
 but some opponents believe they need not
to
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pay for universal tax of
education
. I completely disagree with the above statement and think that paying
tax
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 is
responsibility
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 of
an
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 wealthy individual to make a contribution towards
equal
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an equal
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 society.
To begin
 with,
majority
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 chunk of the population belong to
middle
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 class and they depend on the facilities provided by the
government
. Many hospitals and
schools
 are run by funds collected by means of taxation on people. So it is mandatory for the citizens to pay tax timely in order to help masses of their country indirectly.
For example
 , a labourer may not afford a private school for his children but if
government
schools
 provide them with quality
education
in
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 low rates , it can certainly help in making them literate enough.
Secondly
, our constitution has given
right
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 to
education
 to children from 2 to 12 years of age .
The free
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 and compulsory
education
 has been made mandatory to
masses
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 which can help in improving
literacy
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the literacy
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 rate of the country and eventually it will lead to
strong
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a strong
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 economy . So it is
duty
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 of every individual of our country to take part in
this
 movement. In conclusion, we reach
a
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 overview that helping
government
 institutions not only benefit so many unprivileged masses but boots economy too.
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