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Some people think that instead of preventing climate change, we need to find a way to live with it. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In today's world, it is believed by some part of a population that it might be better for us to get used to
climate
 changes and to live with them rather than spend time trying to change something. I disagree with
this
 opinion and possible arguments will be discussed below.
First
 of all,
to begin
 with, the main reason why
this
 idea is not right is that we have opportunities to intervene and prevent
further
 progression of
this
 tendency.
This
 is because of the fact that not only are there developments in the sphere of technologies but
also
 scientists and ecologists develop new ways of fighting.
Therefore
, if we have a chance to change the situation it seems extremely incorrect to ignore the problem.
For example
, recent research has shown that an introduction of pollution permits in Ukraine has shown outstanding results and pollution was decreased by 20%.
Moreover
, another
evidence
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 why people should try to prevent
climate
 changes is that they may get extremely worse so the Earth may become uninhabitable. The major reason for
such
 a thought is that the
climate
 deteriorates in a geometric progression and without appropriate
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this
 issue may become inevitable.
Hence
, the whole process of global
climate
 change may accelerate and we will not be able to slow it down in the future. Eventually, to conclude, I disagree with the opinion that humans just need to find a way to live with the environmental problems,
firstly
, since there are working technologies which can at least slow down the whole process and,
secondly
, because without an intervention the situation may get extremely worse in the nearest future.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • climate change
  • prevent
  • adaptation
  • mitigation
  • cope with
  • effects
  • shift
  • mindset
  • lifestyle
  • balance
  • invest
  • research
  • technology
  • crucial
  • education
  • awareness
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